Could you correct my essay?





Your class has doing a survey on television and your teacher had asked you to write a composition stating the advantages and the disadvantages of television. write thecomposition between 120 and 180 words.Nowadays, most of people in the modern world seems to have been exposed to watching television since television were created.There are both adavantages and disadvantages.In my case, I have enjoyed watching it for a while. It is must be an essential stuff for me daily.That is why I could get information which are latest understandable news, the weather report, ecocomic news or, attractive documentaries easily. I would love to spend my time on watching historical channels, shilly entertainmentes on it, if I have enough free time. This is one of way to kill time in my life.On the other hand, I have a tendency to get stuck it by lieing down on the sofa ,instead of duties which are washing clothes dishes. After that I would loose two hours that I could have done with something .It is nothing but a waste of time and leads my lazliness.In my conclusion, television is so benefit. However, I have to pace myself when on televison.



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6 Responses to “Could you correct my essay?”

  1. nonacids says:

    Since televisions creation it is one of the most popular pass times for many people, In some cases this could have its advantages but regrettably it also has disadvantages.In my case,Television has been an enjoyable experience since my early youth. It is a part of my daily activities.Television provides me with an array of use full information including news, that keeps me up to date on important events the weather report, which is vital for all of us, economic news or, attractive documentaries which broaden my horizons from knowing things about animals to how small we are in this enormous universe. I love spending my time watching historical channels, or silly entertainments if I have the free time. This is one of way to kill time in my life.On the other hand, Television could be utilized in the wrong ways for instance, I have a tendency to get overwhelmed by the programs that I love so much and loose track of time so it distracts me from things I should do, like duties of which are washing clothes, dishes. After that I would loose two hours that I could have spent doing something else .It is nothing but a waste of time and leads my major inactivity.In my conclusion, television could be beneficial. However, I have to limit myself on time spent watching television.

  2. miscalls says:

    1) Do your own homework..not to be mean, but so that you will learn.2) Use spell check3) Dont’ use the word “nowadays” 4) Try dividing information into paragraphs, instead of one huge paragraph.

  3. becloaked says:

    sure…just mail me the check 1st…

  4. aspirant says:

    Where to start? I will not do your work for you but I give you a hint or two. First,thing you need to check your spelling and some of your sentence structure is … well it is whack! Maybe if you watched less television and crack open a book once in a while, you would not need the help.

  5. mootable says:

    James made some good essay-writing points. But consider these:1. Advantage/disadvantage compared to what? Radio, internet, newspaper, theatre? Advanatge=mobile TV?2. Is this a thinking paper or one you can share your personal likes and dislikes (i.e. anecdotes).3. Modern these days don’t mean much. Even a hut in Africa could have a TV set via satellite.4. Your conclusion is about benefits, does not really tie in with what your teacher wants (ad/disad). Don’t worry too much about grammar (but use the right spelling); correct as you go along. Important thing is write often and express your ideas. It might be a good time to start looking at figures and data, like: how quickly are TVs sold in a developed country (US) and one that is developing (India). Does that information mean anything?

  6. pingala says:

    Nowadays,most people in the modern world seem to have been exposed to watching television since television was created.There are both advantages and disadvantages.In my case, I have enjoyed watching it for a while. It is essential stuff for me daily.That is where I can most easily get understandable information on the latest news; the weather report, economic news or attractive documentaries . I love to spend my time watching historical channels or silly entertainmentes if I have enough free time. This is one way to kill time in my life.On the other hand, I have a tendency to get stuck in it by lying down on the sofa instead of doing chores like washing clothes or dishes. After that I can lose two hours that I could have done something with. It is nothing but a waste of time and it feeds my laziness.In conclusion, television is of some benefit. However, I have to pace myself in my exposure to it.