Can someone please read my essay and correct any errors?





Can someone please help me with my essay? 10pts? Thank you so much. .One of the most interesting people I’ve ever met is Vincent M. Spade. Vincent M. Spade is man who most people would consider mysterious because of his attire. Although he lives an ordinary life, his job as a spy makes him stand out from a typical crowd. He’s got an office in the city of Three Forks in Arizona where I visited to find out some information about him. My experience with him had led me to believe that Vincent is truly a strange person. Opening the door to his office, you find Vincent sitting behind his desk. At the top of his head sits a classic black fur felt fedora hat, tilted to the side, disguising the upper right side of his face. His dark, smooth hair peaks out from under his hat and parts in the center, revealing his sly charcoal eyes. His nose, long, with a slightly curved tip, sits above a slight grin that disappears under the hat’s shadow. He wears a long, beige trench coat buttoned all the way to the top, slightly showing the top of a white collar. On his feet are polished wing-tip shoes that compliment the feather on the side of his fedora hat. Glancing down at his desk, you find a name plate that reads "S. Spade." An array of folders, photos, and documents cover the entire top of the desk. On the left corner, a small lamp light illuminates the dark room and casts a dim shadow over his face. Next to the lamp sits an old, black rotary dial phone surrounded by several coffee mugs. On the right side, a clear glass coffee pot filled with black coffee sits on a stack of newspapers. The wall directly behind him has a large pin-up board nailed to it that has a cluster of more photos and documents. Book shelves and open file cabinets cover the remaining sides of the walls. Despite his mysterious aura, Vincent is welcoming. He has a warm greeting and welcoming smile. Although he has an intense vibe, his has casual manner and a good sense of humor which makes him a pleasant person to be around. He’s extremely witty and clever and knows a lot about his job and the dangers involved in it. His mannerisms and his and his openness make him seem overall very friendly. The experience with Vincent led me to believe that he is a unique person. Everything from his attire to his character is what makes him stand out. The difference between his gloomy vibe and who he is as a real person is also fascinating. Vincent M. Spade is definitely someone that you don’t come across very often.



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  1. nitrosamine says:

    I put this * near points that I changed/addedOne of the most interesting people I’ve ever met is Vincent M. Spade. Vincent M. Spade is *a man who most people would consider mysterious because of his attire. Although he lives an ordinary life, his job as a spy makes him stand out from a typical crowd. He *has an office in the city of Three Forks in Arizona where I visited to find out some information about him. My experience with him had led me to believe that Vincent is truly a strange person.Opening the door to his office, you find Vincent sitting behind his desk. At the top of his head sits a classic black fur felt fedora hat, tilted to the side, disguising the upper right side of his face. His dark, smooth hair peaks out from under his hat and parts in the center, revealing his sly charcoal eyes. His nose, long, with a slightly curved tip, sits above a slight grin that disappears under the hat’s shadow. He wears a long, beige trench coat buttoned all the way to the top, slightly showing the top of a white collar. On his feet are polished wing-tip shoes that compliment the feather on the side of his fedora hat.Glancing down at his desk, you find a name plate that reads “S. Spade.” An array of folders, photos, and documents cover the entire top of the desk. On the left corner, a small lamp light illuminates the dark room and casts a dim shadow over his face. Next to the lamp sits an old, black rotary dial phone surrounded by several coffee mugs. On the right side, a clear glass coffee pot filled with black coffee sits on a stack of newspapers. The wall directly behind him has a large pin-up board nailed to it that has a cluster of more photos and documents. Book shelves and open file cabinets cover the remaining sides of the walls.Despite his mysterious aura, Vincent is welcoming. He has a warm greeting and welcoming smile. Although he has an intense vibe, his has casual manner and a good sense of humor which makes him a pleasant * to be around. He’s extremely witty and clever *, and knows a lot about his job and the dangers *that are involved. His mannerisms and his openness make him seem *, overall, very friendly.The experience with Vincent led me to believe that he *,indeed, is a*n* unique person. Everything from his attire to his character is makes him stand out. The difference between his gloomy vibe and who he * really is *, is also fascinating. Vincent M. Spade is definitely someone that you don’t come across very often.

  2. enisiuc says:

    Does this person really exist? The overall “feel” of your writing is that it is fiction, and the more times I read it, the more it reads as fiction. An essay is not fiction. The writing is both informative and descriptive, but randomly jumps from one to the other, and the sequential flow throughout the piece is all messed up. That’s a problem you should address in making revisions. I can tell you from experience that he is not a spy if he actually exists. In the unlikely event that he does exist, it is much more likely that he is delusional than a (former) spy. No one is going to be convinced by this essay that he exists, much less that he is or ever was a spy. His attire is eccentric (or ridiculous), not mysterious. You visited him to LEARN more information about him, but then you say your experience with him had led you to believe that he was strange, which means that you knew him before you visited him for more information about him (which you don’t tell us). That’s nonsensical. There are few grammatical errors, but the entire writing is so unbelievable that, I’m sorry, it isn’t worth pointing them out because you need to write an entirely new piece of nonfiction. You write well; you just didn’t write a believable essay about a real person.